i liked it a lot. you have progreessed a lot and this song is proof of it. so critique time. there are some pats where the progression wasn't as good as it couldv'e been just a part here and there where adding a small adjustment wouldv'e made all the difference but to a counter to that the rest of the progression was amazing you made an emotion out of your music which is something a lot of people have trouble doing.
great job. don't give up. keep going and keep making music.